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Parts 1 - 3 of my corrections! ^_^

December 31 2002 at 11:10 AM
 


Response to Alternate Adventures, Bios

 
Whee! I feel productive. ^_^ If you want me to do anything like replacing stuff like my name or anything for me to help with in general, just let me know. ^^

Oh, forgot to say that Kiko's hair is about shoulder length, maybe a little higher. Think Xelloss for a girl. ^^;; Ee, I wish I had a picture of my sis. That's what I'm thinking of for hair...

From Part One:
Lastly was the youngest in the group, Hikiko "Kiko" Foxfire. 5'4, 13 years old, hair that was bordering on black streaked with plum and dark brown eyes. She too was caught up in the goings on.

From Part Two:
Kiko felt sick. The world had dissolved into a plethora of colors, all spinning together. All the noise and confusion from the extremity of the continuum was giving her a very big headache. She seemed to be traveling through a tunnel, a spinning one at that, and she had curled into a little ball, repeating to herself not to throw up. She was terrified, and the dizziness and stomach-churning didn't help. She cried out to her friends, heck, she even yelled for Monica, but none of them appeared to be with her in the colorful vortex. She suddenly lurched down and screamed as loud as her lungs were able as she spiraled downward.

The horrid, looming creatures prepared to strike. They had foot-long claws and black, leathery skin. Their gaping jaws displayed razor-sharp teeth that were already stained red from blood. The group of Enchanters and Enchantresses who had been trapped inside the castle away from the battle stared up in fear at them. They stood in the Great Hall, oblivious that the battle was over.
Atop one of the monsters sat a speaker to magical creatures, clothed in a black soldier's uniform. He had a sadistic smirk on his face. "So, you thought you could outwit us, did you? Pathetic. You should've known you didn't stand a chance. Why don't you just surrender?" he asked. The group glared at him. They prepared ice and fire spells in their hands as he continued to talk.
"Now, we'll have no need for that. If you surrender now, I promise to give you all quick deaths," he said.
"Never," Enchantress Catherine replied as icily as the spell she held in her hands.
"Very well. Kill them," he said, but as he waved his hand to command the beasts, a bright light appeared over his head and something, or rather someone, fell on top of him. The group took that moment to fire, their spells engulfing and killing the beasts. The person fell off of the man she had landed on, her almost unconscious body caught by Enchanter Marvin. The others fired again, killing both the man and his creature.
Kiko was dizzily stood up and heard an entire group of people talking to her at once. She wasn't quite sure what they were saying, for their voices blurred together in a mishmash of indistinguishable sounds. She tried to shake her head of the blackness that was creeping into her vision. She whispered softly, "Where am I?" before passing out.

Hikiko's eyes fluttered open. She was lying on a bed where several people in robes were walking around, tending to her and various other people. They were mostly soldiers and other robed people, all of them had wounds of some sort. Their injuries were being tended to, broken arms were set, bleeding heads were bandaged, etc. She bit her lip at the sight of the wounded, having never really seen so much blood before, except in movies. She hopped out of bed and walked up to the first person she saw. It was a woman in long robes who had just finished wrapping someone's burned arm.
"Um... excuse me, miss?" Kiko asked her. The woman turned around.
"Oh, you're awake. How are you feeling?" she asked, concerned.
"I'm fine, thank you. I was wondering where I am..." Kiko questioned. The woman looked her up and down, taking in her flared jeans and black peasant blouse.
"I can see you aren't from around here. You're inside the Domones Castle of Light in the Cenith Kingdom," the woman spoke, moving on to another patient.
"Okay... um... could you please tell me your name?" Kiko asked as she followed the woman, groping for a question while trying to make sense of it all.
"I'm Enchantress Catherine. What's your name, dear?" the woman replied.
“Hikiko. Uh... just call me Kiko. What happened to the soldiers and people here?" Kiko asked. Catherine sighed.
"There were attackers. Everyone is trying to overthrow the throne. Our world is split into two great forces, constantly battling one another. I wish it would all end," she replied. Kiko took this all in while slowly massaging her temples. Nothing was making much sense and passing out had given her a big headache. Kiko sighed and bit her lip, her eyes still lingering on her friend. She thought a moment, then asked, "Is there anything I can do to help?" She needed something to take her mind off things for a while. Catherine looked at her skeptically.
"I'll do anything you want me to. I... I tend to adjust better when I can do something easy like organizing things or cleaning. Please, can I help? " Catherine smiled.
"Of course you may help," she said, and put the girl to work organizing and retrieving medical supplies.

Willow froze as she recognized a familiar figure with short, plum-streaked black hair. “Kiko!” she yelled.

"I'm Vallen Laerdies."
"Corey Lark."
"I'm Willow Mae."
"Rhyssa Ange."
"Hikiko Foxfire."

Phew. So that's parts 1 - 3. There were some instances with just "Liz" written, that would be changed to "Kiko" but that can be done very easily with Word. If you want me to replace anything or do things in general, I'm more than happy to oblige. ^_^

 
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