Hey Lance,
Looks real good, you have great support for affiliates but I must say..
You really should hire a better designer for the webpage and the graphics..
Please, come on.. You are more experienced than at least 90% of people marketing online.
White text on a black background?? I used to have a site like that back in 1997.
But now it's 2009 and there's web 2.0, better designers, css 2.0 etc..
I'll be honest with you, I tried to read the sales page to see what it was about.. Usually I scan the sales pages (like each and every person). But, I skipped your page.. right down to the price and affiliates link.. It started to give me headaches..
You're telling that you're a professional copywriter, you should know these things better than anyone else.. These mistakes make the first pages of every copywriting manual as far as I know and I read bunch of stuff about copywriting.
I don't claim to be a great copywriter, well, actually I don't claim to be a copywriter at all. I market to small niches and I always hire copywriters for the main website copy. I do have 10+ years of experience in photoshop, but I hire designers for the best graphics that I can get, perfect designs which are way over my experience. I suggest you do the same thing too. About the graphics I mean. I think it's best to pay for the best to get the best out of it.
And, don't go to affiliates with predictions.. Especially on forums like these. You only think that your landing page will convert well. Don't think that. Run an adwords campaign on this site and see for yourself. Give us the results not predictions. Tell your potential affiliates this site's conversion rate and show proof.
Prove that it's worth your affiliate's time.
I mean it's hard to be an affiliate, it looks easy but it's really hard and costs a lot.
I wasted 100$ yesterday on adwords just to see if a product was profitable. And, it turned out it's not. Affiliates look for proof of conversions. When I say affiliates, I mean real affiliates who will make most of your total sales.
That's all from me, have a good day..
Wishing you success..
Mustafa
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