This is what Gavok does. Gavok takes a story, and let's say that story is a glass of orange juice. Then he looks at that OJ and he decides that the best and funniest part of the story/juice is the pulp. So Gavok could hand you the whole glass of OJ, full of goodness as it is, but he doesn't! No, that man strains all of the pulp out, puts that in another glass, and makes you drink it! He gives you PURE fun/entertainment. Thank you!
So yeah. It was great. You know what I thought about what I read so far. That first Angel scene was hilarious, and if I read just a single line from the beginning of Vanilla Ice and Dio's scene ("So, who's the lucky guy?") I just crack up. But of course, at the same time, you give us this whole mess of plot advancement and serious stuff. Things with Clay9999 and Kyo... and of course Rock and Choi. All well done.
Then, the way you carry like half a dozen different stories at once, and interweave them all together. Just perfect. Good example of this? Something like how you tell us the fate of Ultros, then immediately use that as a transition to Dio/Ice and what will happen at Park World.
So yeah. It was an adequate job, Gavok. I'll read the rest later, when it's actually posted, and let'cha know what I think then too.
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Posted on Oct 1, 2002, 2:29 PM from IP address 129.49.12.13