Quick review of the new FAJ

by Gavok

 

I like the idea of Jae and NEG taking a break from each other for at least a little while. Especially since when it's my turn, writing NEG is like the South Park guys writing Kenny. Just there in the background doing nothing more than a couple lines and key gags.

The use of Eiji's emails make it a great chapter by default. Though you forgot that I actually used the "sisters" email in an earlier chapter. Still, the use of the "property of ones" email had me rolling.

A long time ago I was thinking of introducing Shermie as Cracker Jack's estranged daughter but forgot about it. Thank God somebody saw the connection ^_^

Definitely needed some prereading, though. Saw some grammatical and typographical issues. Other than that, you did a great jorb.

Gavok
Now it's my turn.



Posted on Apr 21, 2003, 1:28 AM
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