ok ok... let's try for some constructive comments here grin
I like the tone of the ficlet. It pulls you in quite nicely. The first two lines were rather abrupt. If you hadn't mentioned it, I wouldn't have known that they were part of the fic. but they do add to the total tone.
like the writing style. smooth, very smooth. tho' it's a little 'americanised' i guess... like the part about 'tight-assed defense' ^^ (i like that phrase tho' i really do)
am i making sense yet?
and Wolfboy! Wolfboy! I like that name... tho' at first i would think that it didn't really suit Fukuda... but on second thought, the name does rather suit him... i have images of desperation and viciousness... shrug
wahaha lovely read. though the fast read i gave it didn't do it justice... am in the office now...
Heh... lucky for me, it doesn't get my goat when i see my fave character paired up with someone who usually no one would like to see in a yaoi pairing. but then i happen to like fukuda... think he's a character worth digging a little deeper... but now i've got my hands full with the characters on my hand sweatdrop
heh email me with whatever you think or what i just said. i need more practice with commenting... ^^