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April 23 2002 at 8:00 PM
Yev  (no login)
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Response to [fic] Afterwards (1/1) [rated: G][smarm][ficlet]

Typical of your style, I note.... I'm fine with most of it.. except the starting..

It seems stilted, choked, kinda like how you want to start the engine, but it jams up on you.... am I making sense?


 
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  1. yeah - Rage on Apr 26, 5:03 AM
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