Only had time to read the first three chapters, but I'll eventually get around to reading the rest... hopefully soon...
So far, I think it's pretty good. Only a few grammatical errors here and there, and I think there are areas where your expression isn't very fluent, but otherwise, the story is quite interesting (coming from a person with a deep, ingrained dislike of SenRu, that's pretty high praise... jk ^^;; ).
Well... I'll probably have more to say after I've read the rest... ^^;;
Ju-chan
The Blue Elephant |