thanks so much for this ficcy, my dear seishi~
I'll save the gushing for after you post the ficcy at babble. ^^
right, me down to some serious commenting...
for me, POVs are really hard to write, 'coz you have to be mindful of the tenses and all. But you honestly did quite a good job on this one. And I think you portrayed Mitsui's thoughts really well...and I did rather like your description of the sunset. I thought I caught some snatches of light humor as in when the 3 guys fall around playing tag. The fic together gives a feeling of silent content when the 3 are together and I really enjoyed reading the whole thing.
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