I like this style but to begin with it's slightly confusing. Some of your decription is a little odd. and i quote "tightest 70s clothes this side of the world" hmmmm. 1 eyebrow raised
Interesting way to write, stream of conciousness is the only way to describe it. It flows quite well.
You do what you mean to do, it intrigues the audience and is funny. Do this again! Tho' Ryouga you know what I'd say about some of the pairings. 1 eyebrow raised Naw, laughs it's good. Could do a bit more description. laughs Good, good!
Love Lydz^^
P.S. it's singing not sining ^_~
|