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Authors: Liezzy, chibiangel, ye^llow
Pairing: Miyasenmit
Genre: YAOI
Rating: NC-17…lemon…
Notes: lemon lemon lemon…dedicated to Liete oneechan
Disclaimer: the three hot guys do not belong to us…_



Sendoh walked down the street with his bag slung over his shoulder, whistling. He passed by a park and suddenly heard strange noises.

<sendoh^^> mmm....what could that be?

Sendoh became curious so he stepped past the bench and crept closer, where the noise was raising goosebumps on his skin.

<sendoh^^> I can’t believe it...that sounds like....

<mitchy> URGH!

Sendoh parts the bushes and chokes.

<mitchy> ry...ryo....RYOTA!!!

Sendoh stared at the two half-naked basketball players all over each other and turns away into the bushes. Sounds of violent gagging could be heard loudly.

<sendoh^^> what are you two DOING??!

* mitchy notices Sendoh and widens eyes, completely forgetting what he was doing.

* ryochin however didn’t stop until he reached his peak

Sendoh turned bright red and jumped back as he watches ryota reach his peak

Ryota was completely unaware of Sendoh’s presence.

Mitchy however, continued to gape at Sendoh.

<sendoh^^> hey!!! stop!!! this is a public area.
<mitchy> sen...sen...SENDOH?

Sendoh cursed as he tripped on a stone and fell down onto the grass.


<sendoh^^> HEY!!! wh-what are you two DOING?

<ryochin> WHAT THE HECK ARE YOU DOING HERE!?

<sendoh^^> I...I was passing by...*tries to gesture but fails miserably*

<sendoh^^> and then I heard...I heard....*turns crimson*

Mitchy gets up from under ryota and starts dressing up.

<sendoh^^> a-a-answer the question!

<sendoh^^> tell me you two weren't doing what i thought you were....oh nooooo

Ryota dresses also and clings onto mitsui possessively

<ryochin> What did it look like we were doing?

<sendoh^^> I-I don't know! Brushing grass off each other?!

<ryochin> *kisses Mitsui's cheek gently*

Sendoh freaked out as he watched ryota kiss mitsui and scrambles to his feet.

<sendoh^^> AH!!!!!

Mitsui completely ignores Sendoh and leans further into Ryota’s warmth

<sendoh^^> you....you.....

Ryota reached forward and kisses Mitsui fully.

<sendoh^^> you're KIDDING right?!?! this is some joke!!!!

Finally deciding that he had had enough of this blabbering fool, Mitsui pushed away from Ryota and walked towards Sendoh.
Upon seeing mitsui approach him, Sendoh cautiously backed away.

<sendoh^^> ....this isnt funny!!!

Sendoh squeks as Mitsui looks at him with a funny stare. Ryota grinned as he followed his lover and stared at Sendoh with lustful eyes.

<ryochin> Isn't it obvious? Never heard of sex before?
Smiling lustfully, Mitsui walked back to ryota’s side and and whispers something to him.

<sendoh^^> wh-what? stills and blanches so pale he looks like a statue

<mitchy> whispers ne koi, let's give him a lesson on sexual pleasure...

<ryochin> Sendoh hasn't done IT before? grins

<sendoh^^> WAIT!! you guys arent playing a joke on me are you?!?! n-n-ye-no-well AH!!
<mitchy> and they say virgins are the best

mitchy continues to smile lustfully

<ryochin> laughs Even Hanamichi has done it with Rukawa about a million times already! I can't believe this! rofl

<sendoh^^> what does that have to do with...do with...*the sight of the lovers smacking each other distracts him*

<sendoh^^> AHHHH NO WHAT ARE YOU-- cut off

Ryota closes the distance quickly and kisses Sendoh fully on the mouth.
Sendoh panics and breaks away from ryochin's kiss and gasping for air

<sendoh^^> What ARE YOU DOING???!!!

Mitsui starts to bite off Sendoh’s shirt buttons whilst sticking a hand in to feel sendoh’s chest.

<sendoh^^> ACK MITSUI-SEMPAAAAAAI!! GO away!!!

Sendoh tries frantically to swipe at mitchy's hands and twist away from ryota.

<ryochin> grin I'm teaching you a lesson. pulls Sendoh foward again Sex education whispers into his ear

Meanwhile, mitchy has bitten off the last button and was looking at sendoh lustfully. He pulls off Sendoh’s shirt and licks his lips at the sight of Sendoh’s broad chest.

Ryochin starts licking Sendoh's ear and then works his way down.

Struggling, Sendoh tries to scream for help but is silenced by Mitsui with a kiss.

<sendoh^^> please do--mphhh!!!

* sendoh^^ flails wildly and ends up tripping and falling (again)

Ryota catches Sendoh and lays him gently on the grass smirk

* sendoh^^ is stunned for a moment, before reality sets in with the cool wind playing across his bare skin.

<sendoh^^> ARGH GET OFF ME!!!!

Mitsui sits down and stares at the sight before him

<sendoh^^> w-wh-what are you doing?!?!?!

Sendoh manages to sit up and shove ryochin away.
Sendoh blushes like mad as he rushes to collect his thoughts

Ryota falls on the grass, surprised.

<ryochin> grin nice view

Sendoh yelps and crosses his legs as he panics and tries to stand.

Meanwhile, Mitchy smiles as he watches the whole scene.

* sendoh^^ flees into the bushes, leaving his shirt and his bag on the grass.

<ryochin> sigh That's too bad...

The next day~

Sendoh woke up at the sound of his alarm clock. Not surprisingly, the first memory of what had happened last night made him turn green and rush into the bathroom.

Glaring at his reflection in the mirror, Sendoh’s eyes widen he realizes something...

<sendoh^^> oh DAMN! i left my bag with those two last night!

<sendoh^^> -/and along with my shirt because i was too jittery to stay around for a second longer.

<sendoh^^> oh no groans

<sendoh^^> i guess i'll have to go and see if its still there.....damn....luckily my wallet and phone was in my pocket....

The doorbell rings

Pulling on an old jumper to cover his boxers, Sendoh rushed down the stairs to answer the door.

Upon reaching the door, Sendoh opens it without thinking.

<sendoh^^> freaks out so bad his hair stands up even without the gel

Mitsui smiles at sendoh

<sendoh^^> y-you!!!
<mitchy> Good morning sendoh
<sendoh^^> what are you doing here?!?!!??!
<ryochin> yawn Ohayo...
<mitchy> My my,where are your manners?

Sendoh backs away and bangs into the low table.

<mitchy> we came all the way early in the morning to return u your things

mitsui lifts up the bag in his hands

<sendoh^^> now--now don't try anything!!!

<sendoh^^> realizes what they said oh...

Ryota, exhausted from last night, flopped onto the couch and stretched out

With a suspicious glare, Sendoh plucks his bag from Mitsui but freezes as Mitsui warps his arms around him.

<mitchy> don't give me ideas and i won't do anything

<sendoh^^> MATTE!~!!~

Mitchy kisses sendoh full on the lips, his tongue probing Sendoh’s mouth.

Sendoh flushes to the roots of his hair at the sensation and then with a gasp, breaks away and falls onto the couch...where ryochin is sleeping.

<sendoh^^> ack!

<ryochin> Itai! *looks at Sendoh who's now sitting on his lap* ...? blink

Ryota’s look turns into a lustful one when he realises the situation his was in.

<sendoh^^> no no no ryochin its not what you thin---*muffled again but tries frantically to push mitsui away from him.


Mitsui grabs sendoh and forces a kiss on him, his tongue pushes through sendoh’s lips and probes Sendoh’s mouth.

Ducking away forcfully, Mitsui ends up kissing Ryota and Sendoh ends up sandwiched between the two.

Mitchy grins, a lustful look in his eyes

<ryochin> ....*invades Sendoh's mouth immediately*
<sendoh^^> arrrrrghhhhh get off get off get off!!!!!!

Mitchy marks a trail down from sendoh's cheek to his neck

sendoh is so terrified now that his eyes are dilated in shock and his limbs numb.

Mitchy nibbles sendoh's nape
Sendoh freezes.
Meanwhile, ryochin breaks the kiss with a lick and smiles at Sendoh

Growling at the offending fabric that Sendoh was wearing, Mitsui pull it off.

<sendoh^^> squeaks and faints

Ryochin trails his fingers down Sendoh's chest

<sendoh^^> faints dead away

Mitchy marks a trail down sendoh's back

Ryochin nibbles on Sendoh's ear to wake him up

Mitchy pulls down Sendoh's boxers and pinches his ass tightly.

<sendoh^^> wakes with a yelp

<sendoh^^> m-mitsui sempai! ryota!!! realizes where he is and what is happening

Ryota pulls back and admires the view

<sendoh^^> gulps and closes his eyes
<sendoh^^> -//this has got to be a nightmare...a nightmare...//

Ryota grins and reaches down to touch sendoh's member lightly

<sendoh^^> EEKS~!!~
* sendoh^^ tries to scoot away but is restrained by the two boys pinning him.
<sendoh^^> ry-ry-ryota~! speech fails miserably

Mitsui makes a wet trail from sendoh's earlobs to his neck

Mitchy goes back to nibbling sendoh's earlobe

<sendoh^^> *realizes with a sinking feeling that the sensations are.....nice*

Mitchy 's tongue enters sendoh's ear

<sendoh^^> *unconsciously bites his lip and sinks back into whosoever arm is wrapped around his frame

Ryochin bites and licks down Sendoh's body

<sendoh^^> a..ahhh!!!

<sendoh^^> m-m-matte! what are you doin--*fades off into incoherence*

Mitchy 's tongue enters in and out of sendoh's ear

Mitchy trails off to sendoh's neck

<sendoh^^> exhales deeply and shivers involuntarily
<sendoh^^> sh-should we b-be doing th-thi--*GULP*

* mitchy bites sendoh's nape

Ryochin stops at Sendoh's navel and thrusts his tongue in, playing around with it.

Mitchy makes a mark at sendoh's nape
Mitchy whispers huskily into sendoh's ear

<mitchy> don't worry aki chan
<mitchy> i promise u the time of ur life
<sendoh^^> turns into boneless spaghetti


<ryochin> *one hand reaches down to carress Sendoh's cock* ...Mm...tastes good... *bits into Sendoh's flesh*
<sendoh^^> AAAAAH~!!~!~ gasps and sinks into the touch

Ryochin squeezes Sendoh's member a little

<sendoh^^> ah-ah-AH~!~ *arches up into ryota's hand*
<ryochin> starts pumping ... *smiles and looks up at Sendoh's face*

Mitchy starts licking his own fingers
Mitchy puts one slick finger into sendoh's opening
<ryochin> *pumps at a steady rythm until Sendoh is very hard, then suddenly takes hand away*
<sendoh^^> n-no ryota~!!!~
<sendoh^^> bites lip again and groans

Mitchy put second finger into sendoh

<ryochin> Relax... you want more...? smiles

Mitsui pumps his fingers in and out.
mitchy sticks third finger and touches a soft spot

<sendoh^^> *is dizzy with the double sensations now and is only able to gasp and thrust backwards into mitsui's touch and nod to ryota
Ryochin licks the tip tentatively
Mitchy rams into sendoh
Sendoh^^ screams and pants.

Mitchy groans as he thrusts in and out of sendoh

<ryochin> *envelops Sendoh's member in his mouth and starts to move up and down*
* sendoh^^ gasps as he finds a rhythm and hesitantly, then forcefully pushing back at the invading member

Mitchy thrusts harder into sendoh

<sendoh^^> A-A-AHHHH~!!!~

<mitchy> Screams SENDOH U ARE SO TIGHT!!

Ryochin stops and just allows Sendoh to thrust in his own rhythm


Mitchy feels his edge coming
Sendoh^^ gasps raggedly and feels the sensations sweeping over him in a tidal wave, flooding his senses and taking him over...
Mitchy does one final thrust before spilling himself into sendoh

<sendoh^^> i'm c-c-i'm AHHHH!!!!
<mitchy> DAMMIT! * ryochin swallows the seed

Mitchy kisses sendoh's back
Sendoh pants and rests back against mitsui
Ryochin sits up and attempts to stand up

<ryochin> Ooh. You two are heavy....where

Mitchy hugs on to sendoh from behind

<ryochin> where's your bathroom Sendoh?
<sendoh^^> tumbles breathlessly onto the floor

Mitchy looks at ryochin

<sendoh^^> points vaguely with a shaky finger th-there

Mitchy looks back at shakey sendoh
Mitchy scoops sendoh up onto his arms

<ryochin> yeah, thanx turns back How's the lesson? Enjoyed it?
<mitchy> where is your room?

Ryochin starts for the bathroom upstairs and mumbles something about a cold shower

<sendoh^^> uh...uh.....*squeaks*
<mitchy> blinks

Mitchy gives his most charming smile
Mitchy kisses sendoh's forehead
Sendoh^^ waves upstairs with a weak hand

<mitchy> daijoubu sendoh
<mitchy> u need to rest that's all
<mitchy> i'm not going to force myself on you
<sendoh^^> y-y-yes

Mitchy carries sendoh up the stairs

<sendoh^^> rest
<sendoh^^> faints dead away this time

Mitchy smiles at the sight of sleeping sendoh

Mitchy walks to the bathroom and sneaks in

Ryochin strips off his clothes, unaware that the door isn't locked
Mitchy wraps his arms around ryochin
Mitchy nibbles ryochin's earlobes

<mitchy> whispers into ryochin's ear
<mitchy> gomen ne ryochin
<mitchy> u didn't come.....

Mitchy inserts finger into ryochin
Mitchy hits a soft spot

<ryochin> gasps Ah! body jerks foward

Mitchy grins
Mitchy pulls out fingers
<ryochin> He...hey!

Mitchy makes a wet trail down ryochins chest
Mitchy suckles ryochin's navel

<ryochin> pants Hisashi....hurry...ugh...*gasps*

Ryochin thrusts foward against Mitsui desperately


Mitchy slowly travels down some more carefully ignoring ryochin's throbbing member
Mitchy bites ryochin's tighs

Ryochin thighs tighten around Mitsui, body limp as it leans against the wall
Mitchy lifts ryochin to rest on his hips
Mitchy impales ryochin

<ryochin> AHHH~~!!!!

<mitchy> Dammit!
<ryochin> still panting eh?
<mitchy> can't believe u are still so tight

Mitchy rams into ryochin

<ryochin> snicker You don't want me to? *wraps arms around Mitsui's neck

<ryochin> OW!
<mitchy> of course i want u to...

Mitchy thrusts into ryochin faster and harder

Ryochin wraps legs around Mitsui's waist and starts thrusting along with the speed

Mitchy reaches his climax and spills himself into ryochin

<ryochin> Aa.....AHHHHHH!!!!!!!!! climaxes and spills his seed onto Mitsui
<mitchy> panting

Mitchy holds on to ryochin
Ryochin , exhausted, rests his head on Mitsui's shoulder and falls asleep.
Mitsui carrries ryota to sendoh’s bedroom ,lies him onto the bed and cuddles in between them.


THE END…….

AriGato for your time..

This isn't a detailed account of the whole fic, just my overall impression. Spelling and grammar aside, the whole thing's a PWP and it would've been nice if you've pointed that out in your warnings. And, to be blunt, it's just lines and lines of smut. 'Nuff said.

-- Nagy

actually...it was an rp done by chibiangel, liez and me...but i wanted to try to make this rp into something like a urm...story...so i changed abit of it...

do you think i should leave in rp form or redo this again? Really appreciative of your advice!

huggles and kisses
ye^llow

Okay, first off... I would say that this is not a fic. It's a roleplay. Roleplays do not equal fics, despite the recent trends saying otherwise.

Second, as Nagy has said, this is smut. Pure, simple smut. At the risk of sounding crude, how many ways can the guys screw each other again?

To make your fic stand out, you can either have a unique concept or write well enough to make that fic stand out in it's other shadows.

I know this is going to be harsh, but your 'fic' is neither. The plot is common, and the writing is commonplace.

There are many ways to write smut. I am not one who writes it, but still, I believe a way better job can be done. Instead of having those <> dialogues, the whole effect of it can be so much better if you three had bothered making it into complete sentences that flow.

That's all I want to say.... Since this is a dedication, I do suggest that you guys put more work into it.... Make it something you can be proud of.

Yev

urmm..needed to ask this, do think this will be better as an rp or a fic?

Really appreciative of your advice.

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ye^llow

your writing can carry it out... a fic

I'll warn you first... it's going to be hard work getting this into a fic... but it'll work much better..

Personally, I don't think much of rps. I think they're rather pointless, and only works well for humor.

Also, I didn't mention this earlier, but you still have to settle the problem of OOCness....

okies! Thanx!

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ye^llow

A/N: Mmm Ye^llow told me that she had beta-ed the RP, so I came here to take a look. As can probably be seen, I am not very good at roleplaying so I spent a short time coming up with my own version of the RP, after reading the comments posted. It's not the whole thing that was acted out, rather it's my personal version. Neither is it edited in any way lol this is raw from my brain and rating, if any, is all inferential. Just a little contribution I guess. I was involved in the RP purely for fun, and didn't really guess it was going to be a dedication lol (Sorry if I let Ye^llow or Chibby down with my "acting") Anyway...

*@*

It was six in the evening. The tall boy who trudged along the sidewalk, a seasoned white sports bag slung over his shoulder, could only sigh in relief as he turned the corner and saw the small park that separated him from his house. As Sendoh Akira geared himself up to a light jog that made his exhausted muscles tighten slightly, the Ryonan second-year caught the sound of low giggles and laughter that drifted on the wind towards him.

Shrugging, he moved into the compound, noting that it was getting dark. He hurried along, when suddenly the bushes he had been about to jog past parted, and two figures rolled uncontrollably out, crashing untimely into him even as his feet scrambled in an attempt to escape. He felt the weight roll onto his ankle, and he yelped in surprise, falling back onto the soft grass with a dull thud.

"Gomen," he started to apologize, but at the sound of his voice, one of the figures whipped around.

"Sendoh?" Dark eyes suddenly focused on him, as he blinked in surprise and noticed who the two boys were for the first time. What were Mitsui Hisashi and Ryota Miyagi doing so far out from Shohoku at this time of the night?

His gaze traveled the full length of the two other basketball players, and then he flushed as the answer came to him.

"Well," he started, but nothing else came out of his mouth. What could he say?

Miyagi sat up leisurely, brushing away the grass on his rumpled jeans and open shirt. Mitsui obviously cared less. The older boy simply sat there, a small smile on his lips as he surveyed the Ryonan student.

"Well what, Sendoh?"

His usual confidence and smiling demeanor snapped back into place. "Get a room," he laughed, as he rose to his feet.

As he turned to leave, a hand suddenly closed in around his ankle.

*@*

I only quickly scanned over the original rp, and I guess I have to agree with Nagy and Yevvy...

First off, the style in which it was written (rp) isn't really appropriate for fics , perhaps with the exception of humour...

Also, the language that was used wasn't too crash hot, either. shrugs

That being said, I thought that Liez's "rewrite" actually shows some promise... don't know if it's the hentai in me, but I'd definitely read a fic like that... wicked grin

So, that's about all from me... ^^

- Ju-chan -
The Blue Elephant

Work on it and continue it if you wish....... but do take note of little details.. like chickenroast. ( o_o;;;;;;) says..

I don't write smut, so I can't point out these little details for you at first glance.. glad that someone else contributed...

hehe...should have given the rp to you to see first b4 posting ^.~

tickles liezzy silly

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ye^llow

i hate to be harsh, but the grammer and spelling are altogether quite horrendous. i skipped most of the story, but when i got near the end, i saw some things that were interesting:
1) you can't penetrate the anus with a finger. it HURTS! sheesh haven't you heard of lubrication?
2) how did one finger turn into fingers in his anus? magic in the rectum?!
3) i honestly doubt one can get pleasure in either penetrating a dry anus or having a dry anus penetrated.
i know i may seem anally retentive but you really have to look into details like this.
oh if i haven't mentioned before, this was downright badly written porn.
arigato, thank you for your time.

You "hate to be harsh"...?

rofl

- Ju-chan -
The Blue Elephant

just to to add my own pickiness

dry finger anal entry - it CAN feel good. depends on the guy and depends on how experienced, or relaxed they are. Even going so far as to getting fucked dry is perfectly fine for a guy if he's feeling for it. (Usually more experience one from what I can tell so it's not like they're virgins) It may hurt some, but that doesn't mean it doesn't feel good. <-- like fisting.


But otherwise, ditto for the other points.

hmmm thanks for your input... it was pretty insightful =p
and to Ju-chan yes i really didn't want to be harsh it was just that the rp was quite badly done, in terms of style and storyline...

AriGato for the piece of advice ne! ^________^ This is my first lemon demo...i guess i should have checked up b4 rushing into it. ^______^;;;;;


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ye^llow

erm... didn't think that imouto-chan would actually post it here....thought you would just send it to oneechan!!! ^.^;;;; ah well... it isn't surprising that rps are full of grammer mistakes and whatnot... rps are for humour...definitely. if you told me that you were gonna post it here or something, I wouldn't have been in my drowsy-gonna-fall-asleep mode ^^;;; ...best thing is, if you're gonna write a PWP fic with this, you'd at least have to rewrite it imouto dear... would be glad to be of assisstance in any way, since I can't write anything at the moment...not in at least a month's time...

lol...gomen nasai oneechan...didn't want to bother you with the betaing of the ficcy...hehe, demo , daijoubu ne...i wil try and brush up on this MORE with the help of the ppl here that it is*points to the elephants*.

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ye^llow