It's because of writing like this why I don't read the "Horror" genre. Although I really want to because I used to love horror.
When I was 12 and reading "Carrie" by Stephen King for the first time I may have given "the Lebo Coven" a read beyond the first page. But now at 42 most horror is somehow a derivative of King's. And I find it boring. Re-reading "Carrie" or "Night Shift" would be more entertaining.
It may be the kind of writing that sells horror books these days, but "The LEBO Coven" just is not intense enough to get me back into the horror genre. If it doesn't grab me in the first paragragh, I don't want to read it. I've wasted too much time reading a book in hopes it will turn out to be a good story and it never does.
Maybe this is what sells in the horror genre these days, but from this small part I've read I'm not impressed.