[quote]Know yur material and "break it down" before You write somthing that could be deemed "dis-respectfull" Just seems that u claim, the "matrix" was the only movie or novel too discuss this certain topic....... This is not the case, U should pay homage too the novels that talked bout this topic.... ![/quote]
A hacker who recieves a disconcerting e-mail which eventually leads him to another world, is for me very much similar to Matrix' premise. Sure, Matrix is a derivative work in its own right, but the story told there in my opinion was much more amusing than this one and to add to it, the movie was memorable.
That is why anything with the similar plot knot will remind me of it.
In writing, there is always a danger of reusing similar relatively unusual plot devices - the worse danger than that of cliches. After all, the majority of fantasy books are written on the topic of 'the great ancient evil and how we had defeated it'.
So, unless a clever hacker working for a respectable company, getting a mysterious e-mail/message that he can neither trace, nor explain that leads him to a new world is indeed a sci-fi cliche that I am not aware of, the useage of it will be commonly associated with the pop-cultural phenomenon that is Matrix.
But even if that's the case, the awkward writing remains. It is one of the examples where an author seems to sit on the fence. Neither he is interetsed in plunging into the every-day laguage and trying to avoid 'prettiness' - GRR Martin - neither he can achieve the climax of prettiness as GG Kay does.
In Kay, the circumnavigating will look in place, here, it sticks our like a sore thumb.
The mastery of language is as important as a compelling, tight plot. Hesitant language always gives me impression of the writer being not too experienced. What I look for in a published novel is to be awed by the writer's talent. If I see something that a good level unpublished amateur can produce, it does not interest me.