Just read the first segment of your book and think I will like it. I like novels revolving around cooking or baking. However, one thing stood out for me in the following paragraph:
"Let me fix a little something," Gus said to her daughters, their
friends, her colleagues, her viewers. She truly loved the idea of
taking care, of nurturing and nourishing. Especially those guests
who found it hard to make their way in the crowd: Gus always looked
out for "those ones" the most.
The words "those ones." I was was corrected by my teachers and in turn corrected my children in the use of this phrase - the word "ones" should be left off.
The correct way to make this statement should be: "Gus always looked out for those the most." I was surprised the editors let that slide.
Sorry, I have done a lot of proof-reading in my journalistic endeavors and these things just jump out at me. I do plan to finish the book however.
