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Sales letter review

August 27 2003 at 2:34 PM
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  (Login nathanargyle)
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Response to Please check my sales letter

 

I really liked the section on "having 3 choices". I think it is very persuasive.

I was a little confused by your headline. I think it could be clearer? You could say something like, "Are you losing money because email filters are sending your ezines to the trash? If you use FreeAutoBot Hotmail and Yahoo users are probably not getting your ezine!"

It would improve your letters effectiveness to focus more on how your product will benefit customers. Speak directly to the reader by using the words "you" and "your." The words "you" and "your" should appear more than the words "I", "we" or "me."

I would love to help you more. Email me at nathanargyle@comcast.net if you are interested.


Nathan Argyle
Marketing Consultant & Copywriter
Successful Selling Words

 
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