Wesley, your site looks good. but here's a couple of ideas for you to digest.
1. Your page took around 18 seconds on my computer to display your headline and opening paragraph. It might have just been a slow connection, but that's how long it took on my computer.
You need to display your headline and opening paragraph ASAP. Studies have shown you have 8 seconds to grab someone's attention from the moment he clicks on your link. Any longer, and 1/3 of people leave (and the longer it takes, the more people leave).
Try breaking your copy up into chunks, then pasting each chunk into a seperate table. The first table should contain your headline and opening paragraph.
This will allow the copy to display once it's table has fully loaded. The rest of the tables/copy can then download in the background whilst your visitor has already started reading.
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2. I'd up the proof of how important golf psychology is... what about quoting a number of players talking about pschology, and a few case studies. That would work well. Right now you only have a 2 line quote from Jack Nicholas.
The rest of your copy looks pretty good... mind you, I don't know enough about golf to really know if it is any good.
Good luck with it all.
Lenny Eng
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