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Watching you go

November 22 2002 at 4:26 PM
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Finn 

Footsteps,
across the tiles,
hinges,
whining
sunlight slants
through and open
doorway
your silhouette
on the floor
the door slams
you are gone
from the floor
from the door
Better to
watch my feet,
than watch
you go...

 
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Dead Poet

I see beauty in your choice of words...

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November 22 2002, 7:09 PM 

mmm, so soothing and comforting. Crafty manipulation of words- simply beautiful!. Just like a wonder drug for my craving brain. This is the real stuff..more of it, bara.

 
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Mangi-nambis

Re: Watching you go

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November 23 2002, 12:03 PM 

...wes da rest?

 
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dead poet

Re: wes da rest?!

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November 24 2002, 6:54 PM 

sssss....stap isi...guy is still "brewing" them!

da dead!

 
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