I get up in the morning for work at a quarter to five,
Walking into the bathroom to splash water into my
eye's, Turning on the kettle while brushing my teeth,
Thinking about the day ahead and all the fucking grief,
This is not the kind of life that i want for me and my
family
(C)
Life is hard enough with all the stress an pain~Its
hard to maintain with so much strain~The weight
on my shoulder's there crumbling under pressure~
Iv got to find a way to make life better~
Getting into work, Thinking here we go again, There
is a million different thing's i could do than stand here
for eight hour's again, Out everyday working
my fingers to the bone! All for what, A shit pay cheque,
And a broken back bone, fake sickness just to get
sent home, Sprial into depression & slip into a zone,
Enter in the pub and drinking till it closed.
(C)
Life is hard enough with all the stress an pain~Its
hard to maintain with so much strain~The weight
on my shoulder's there crumbling under pressure~
Iv got to find a way to make life better~
I try to find the time to spend with my only son who only
just this year turned the age of one, I hardly ever
see him that tear's me up inside sitting there looking
in his little bright blue eye's, He doesn't know any
better he is to young to understand it, That if i could
i'd give him everythink on this planet.
(C)
Life is hard enough with all the stress an pain~Its
hard to maintain with so much strain~The weight
on my shoulder's there crumbling under pressure~
Iv got to find a way to make life better~
My soon to be wife god love her i know just how much
she tries, She looks after us so well, she will always be
a gem in my eye's, I don't know were i'b be if she got
up an flee, But some time's i really do wonder how she
put's up with the like's of me, She does an im
thankfull for that belive you me, This women i will
marry an stay with for all eternaity
JD Rapper..(Just the way i'm feelin at the moment)
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im feelin the tension in the hook...thas one of the best aspects of this song/poem
it read more like a poem to me which is fine, if that is your intention
if not, it needs editing to add more flow/rhythm
bad points are how it is worded at some spots and also how believable it is...at the end you said it's how youre feelin at the moment which implies it may be just poetic expression and certain aspects like the wife and kid arent to be taken literal
but the job aspect seemed real to me, it painted the picture of a worker in the UK who is on his feet all day doing manual labor like a warehouse worker...i know what thats like and i was feelin that part the most
overall i enjoyed reading this the very first time i read it and i liked the fact that it stuck with me and lingered for so long...i wasnt sure if i was going to still like it after the first read but to be honest i think the way you painted a picture with the amount of words as you did is pretty good you should post more like this
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