Thanks for your feedback. I hope to get a chance to write another chapter soon in order to get a bit more character development.
And as far as the humor within the story, neither dub nor I were looking for humor, *per se,* but rather setting up the basics of the story (the only outright humor I went for was the Keith Richards bit). The humorous aspect is the sheer absurdity of the premise -- that a Twinkie could ever become sentient.
t.ogre
qwfh
Posted on May 4, 2003, 4:51 AM from IP address 216.40.210.72