yo we got a real shot at this shit dog.. blocks is weak.. and theory well eh.. thats da problem... heres da solution
previous battle...wreck shop
This bitch screaming out my name like a mother-fucking bitch/(wack)
Keep talking shit u wind up face down in a ditch//1(wack)
Klassik's rhymes are easily stepped-over/(good setup)
Just like his dead body will be used as a left-over//2
(wack)(see how his delivery is off what da fuck left overs
have 2 do wit being easily steped over)its ehh...
convinced ur seeing optical illusions/ (good setup)
While i slang words that lead to impossible conclusions//3(wack) again the punch is ehh.. but i'd givem creativity pts.. 4 tryin.. still ehh...
Your the epitome of density, While I redefine immensity/
What I spit is fully equipped to battle all levels of intensity//4(the whole bar didnt make sense he was juss tryna use big words 2 say nothing..(wack)
You getting done-in worse than yo mom when I had her in the"Pretzel Position"/ ok... used but good setup
Wit my impeccable wisdom,hitting with my freestlye precision!/(no delivery) <not connecting barz>
as i stand in prime condtion~step to da plate to take more affliction//5(wack)
I’ll hold yo mom down wit my dic and then smother her with my balls/ (stretched)
til she open up her jaws, and I CUM in like NIAGRA FALLS//6 (cum and niagra falls have nothin in common)
Flowing against me was just plain suicidal/ (nice setup)
im just saying if ur quick to die-then this is vital/(filler)
cuzz i'll take harder cracks then simon from american idol//7(nice concept needed 2 be WORDEd beter
Dis bitch cant handel me-im like MIKE TYSON at the top of the food chain/...(dumb as fuck)
concocting punches,putting strain~on his brain/(filler)
cuzz nigga i qonquered,saw,'n' came~i guess im riding solo in da hall-of fame// (wack) made no sense what so ever)
KLASSIC
ill lead bull's 2 fine china juss 2 wreck~shop(nice set up since his name was wreck shop) (wordplay pts)
expect~u'll~flop like obeast bitches cuz dis hedge-HOG a never be on top// (ehh streched was ehh) i forced da punch
i'll smack him like Ike mackin cuz he more of a bitch than MIKE when's he NOT rappin// ( mike d iceberg a C.A. battle mc who talks alot)( nice set up C.A. peeps loved that 1)
u ca self~inflict~passion, but 'choked chickens' is da only way wreck a be 'vet assassin'...(tight delivery heat 4 sho)read that bar carfully that da shit we need)
check ya last win, n c da page-vacant, lightweight huh! this kids about heavy as aid's-patient..(heat) see how it make sense..
da rage-blatant, whats ta hide wreck wouldnt know a 'cut blazin ' if he sort da Band~aid~ah~satan.. (tight but some might not get it) so its ehh..
wreck's board's a game like a play-station, n if he keep bustin my 'chops' memory cards wont save-his-BACON..(tight)
dis gay's-hatin but wreck know's he loves my FLAMES, like valentine's day wit a arson.. (ehh filler)(but good setup)
but he still a SMALL FRY, cuz da only time this 'guy cums big' is when he romancin wit large men... (nice bar here)
but like i said da gay jokes r ehhh..
y should i ARGUE him'?? lets 'talk bread' i'll let da 'toast BARK' on u B4 da barz r in!!... gangsta shit is always hood....
u have to paint a picture.. but every bar has got to be.. wow.. where did he get that from.. if u wanna win.. we need ta have some spits down pack.. like post a 10 bar battle script 4 me by tonight.. let me critic it.. and tell u where u need 2 go... im gonna do the same thing and u have u look at my verse and tell me what u like and what u dont like... i wanna win.. dont really care if i lose but shit i wanna prepare to win rather than add another L to da list...
get back at me
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