Re: I don't know why....May 14 2017 at 9:54 PM
|Chan Fan Man (Login Chan_Fan_Man)|
Response to I don't know why....
It's actually a very accurate rendering of the events of the film, I was particularly impressed by the description of the fight. My main criticism is you haven't taken enough advantage of the opportunity to get inside Tang Lungs head - it needs more of what he's thinking and feeling. I know there are bits in your story that aren't in the film, but I feel you need more to further differentiate it. As it is, people can just watch the film instead.
*I always thought the child with the ice cream was a boy*
Re: I don't know why.... - JACKY on May 15, 2017, 2:57 AM
- *shrugs again* - Horace on May 15, 2017, 4:03 AM
- A suggestion to Horace - Anonymous on May 15, 2017, 4:56 AM
- Re: A suggestion to Horace - Horace on May 15, 2017, 5:23 PM
- Re: A suggestion to Horace - Shaolinguy on May 15, 2017, 5:35 PM
- A sample of things to come - Horace on May 15, 2017, 11:29 PM
- Too much detail? - Chaochihao on May 16, 2017, 1:03 PM
- Re: Too much detail? - Horace on May 16, 2017, 2:52 PM
- Good works from Chaochihao and Horace - KFMan on May 17, 2017, 6:17 PM
- Chapter 9.... - Chaochihao on May 18, 2017, 8:57 PM
- Re: Chapter 9.... - JACKY on May 21, 2017, 2:41 AM