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November Rain

August 17 2005 at 11:38 PM
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Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind... Such a great movie

Not sure if I'm done with this one, but, it feels done so far.

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November Rain (I Love You)

Rain—don’t lie, you cried—never reminded me,
(I’m just trying to hide through the night)
Of midnight on the lake—
Though, for the air, now
Solid beneath our feet.
Drawn the mask and face upon, a comedy divine.
And leaving twin trails across uncertain darkness
(just one where I held you close)
Curling with every hesitation,
Each surrender—to love, to joy—to each other and ourselves,
A memoriam to where we danced.

Now penning—with our entirety—words that, not by end, but means outweighed—
Now breathing words across your neck, that flowed between our hands—

I love you, and, I don’t know what I can say,
(didn’t breathe, you smiled)
And in time, the snow would glow, aflame.
And in time, sand diffused to sky—
And the waters held the weight of our reflections.
Frames that grinned with all our worlds,
These truest moments of our bliss.
Binding, with the iodine relief that comes in age—
(erosion, drawing us within ourselves)
Drawn anew the words o’erlain, and
I’m trapped between the two—

Now blinking flecks of heaven, walking the lines where we’d stressed its ashy face—
Now wading across the bluest sky, earth threatening to fall out beneath our feet.


    
This message has been edited by WondersmithWest from IP address 68.144.28.13 on Aug 18, 2005 8:02 AM


 

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