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The End

March 6 2007 at 4:57 PM
  (Login Sarecca)
from IP address 80.41.231.103

 
Just me on the subway,
Travelling to the end,
Like a firefly caught in a spidersweb
Knowing twighlight's just around the bend.
I realise that darkness is getting near
As the light of day begins to fade
Everything becomes so unclear
All alone on the subway.

This penetrating wound
It's deep and it's real
And it seems that my fate is forever sealed.

The haunting, creeping silence echoes in my head.
The end of the line looms closer
And I remember all the things you said.
I know deep down there's no escape,
I must face this fate alone.
All I can do is sit and wait
On the subway to the end.


I know it's not amazing but it's my first attempt so please comment or offer constructive critisism.

 
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Anonymous
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81.157.50.235

Re: The End

March 6 2007, 7:02 PM 

shut up, first attempt, its bloody good, i really like it, you should def keep it up. nice one

 
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