For Some Reason, I liked it ALL But the BRIDGE...

by Stan

 

Hi PETE!

Things went Well in this Song's Asemmbly Process, and the Conclusion was Well-Arrived!

But the BRIDGE seemed a "Speed Bump" for me...maybe it was the Brother-Mother Rhyme Scheme...just seemed "Off" rather than BOOSTIN' my Consciousness to its "Highest Level" in the Song, as it's Supposed to Do...

Yearned for a "Parin' Down' of the Line Length too...this Puzzle has BIG PIECES in it! So it's probably runnin' a tad "Long" when Sung, right?

Other'n those Nits, this was an Interesting Read, Good Angle, Well-though Out.

Kudos!

Stan



Posted on Mar 2, 2000, 10:21 AM
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