Graham,
I agree with what Barbara has said. I also noticed the different rhyme schemes and back to back word rhymes(forever-forever). I find it a little less than the standard you have previously set. Nothing new in the message either and very little visuals if any at all. I take the singer to be a male since the returnee comes back and " flaunts charms", which usually implies a woman, yet Stan seems to think it is a man. Maybe you could tighten this area up a little.
I'm confident you will make a good one of it.
Welcome back,
Pete
Posted on Mar 3, 2000, 10:25 AM from IP address 152.163.197.77