I'd take a close look at the line in your Chorus before putting this to bed:
Red button got pushed in by us
It might just be me, but the phrasing here seems really forced-in. It just doesn't read, and I can't see how it would sing naturally. It's in a pretty important place too, setting up the hook as it does -- so kick it around.
Otherwise, this has tightened quite well ...
Don Rowe
Posted on Mar 3, 2000, 11:36 AM from IP address 209.145.177.122