Fun Song!

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Hi Frankie!

This was a very fun read! I liked it very much! Think all of us would like to take off like that every now and then

The only little suggestion I might make is to look at removing some of the "and's" or "but's" at the beginning of some of the lines, just to condense a little. Other than that, looks perfect to me!

Good luck with it

Susan



Posted on Mar 4, 2000, 9:59 AM
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