Hi Michelle, I liked this one from the first time you posted it. I can hear Chely Wright singing this. And let me just say......the chorus is awesome! I love the way you intertwine your hook in it. However, as good as this is I still see one flaw. For me, your second verse doesn't really do anything to bring the storyline along. It just talks about more material things that you've gotten rid of......kind of repetitive. One way you could go w/ this would be to have the second verse talk about how you sometimes go out to the clubs to try to get back into the swing......you've danced and talked w/ some guys, gotten a few phone numbers, but something doesn't feel right.....you just can't move on, and then lead back into your chorus. Good luck w/ this Michelle, and keep it up.
Posted on Mar 7, 2000, 2:04 AM from IP address 63.14.79.220