Very fun upbeat lil' song you got here! I've made a couple comments and suggestions for your consideration!
What's A Girl Gonna Do
Verse:
Cruisin' down this boulevard
My mind's like a Nascar
You know how to get me going
One look, my hearts' showing
That first kiss sure did capture my soul
What an emotional bliss from the go
***I saw Vic's comment on the second line, what about..."My mind's racing like a Nascar"? Also the last line I was thinking of incorporating Vic's idea of overdrive, maybe something like, "It was an emotional overdrive from the go"? Maybe? Maybe not...just thinking out loud here!
Chorus:
What's a girl gonna do
When she's in love for the first time
When she's found the right guy
What's a girl gonna do
When she's so deep into
A man's heart - like you
***I like the chorus here, and I understand what you're getting at with it, but I almost find myself asking so....what's a girl gonna do? You say it right, but never really give us an answer.
Verse:
Going for your love at top speed
Nothin's gonna stop me
Won't lead love down a dead end
It'll always circle around again
You gave the green light into your heart
Got your love in sight from the start
***I really like this verse! Especially the always circle around again line. Very cool!
Chorus: Repeat
Bridge:
Gonna cherish every moment
Make all our dreams last
Gonna hold your heart forever
Cause baby, you're my man
Yeah...that's what I'm gonna do
Chorus: Repeat
Copyright 2000 Marilyn Oakley
Good job Marilyn! Of course all comments are only my opinions, and so of course, take them for whatever that's worth.
Posted on Mar 23, 2000, 3:20 AM from IP address 216.26.32.107
