Very Close

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Hey Stan,

I think you've got a good start on a tear jerker here. I wasn't sure about the sudden reference to the ring? Didn't see where that was introduced earlier on. Is this intended for a female, that's how I heard it. Only other suggestions, is paint some pictures in the storyline, that would really make us feel for this gal. Good luck with it. Colleen



Posted on Mar 24, 2000, 7:14 AM
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