We're Talkin' "GREAT IMAGERY HERE," Kat!

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Wow, I'm Impressed...Great TITLE, Too!

Don't KNOW if Many of today's Younger Babes ARE "This Concerned", but it's a GREAT "Character Study!"

1st Verse, Last Line: Is that a TYPO on "Hand?" Certainly the PLURAL makes more sense! Hey, she's been a "BUSY Babe," Oughta have Demons on BOTH Hands!

Chorus: GREAT "Punch-line! FUN!

2nd Verse: LIKE the "Broken Mirrors" Imagery--1st 4 Lines are Great!
"Prayin' the Rosary" "wishin' to Be Immaculate"...HMMM! (This Gal IS SICK!) (She's in the INSANITY Phase...Intended, Yes?)

3rd Verse: "Usin' Heartaches as a Compass"...
What A GREAT IMAGE!
Last Line kinda Sags...Needs a KILLER LINE, IMO...
(Suggested Stand-In:)
"Can't make it Here, 'Cuz She's still There!"

You WERE Dealing with "Navigating"...I'd stay with "That Directon"/ Skip "Repairs!"

"BRAVO" & "KUDOS!"
So many Nuggets Each Verse, 'twas like Visitin' the Lost Dutchman!
Stan



Posted on Mar 28, 2000, 10:35 PM
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