Lacks Consistency

by glen

 

This is my opinion, toast or not:

There is no consistency in the personal pronouns, first of all. The first verse is from "I" the second verse is "he" the third verse is "I" again and the bridge is "he" again..rather confusing.. Secondly, you rewrite english with your rhyming schemes. by putting the gerund "packing" at the end of the phrase to make it rhyme..Nobody talks that way. Same thing for "hitches". I guess this song is about a mother telling her son its alright to come home again, despite his failures, and be proud by using his real name..If this is what it is about, I think it needs to be made a lot clearer without the convoluted language..



Posted on Mar 29, 2000, 11:29 AM
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