"In My Shoes" -- critiqued

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I'm having a little trouble with your hook in the Chorus/Revised Chorus. There's something missing that doesn't connect others laughing to the singer crying, and in so doing, shedding some new light on the "walked a mile in my shoes" cliche. Tinker with it ...

Don Rowe







Posted on Apr 5, 2000, 12:45 PM
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