I'm with Graham...

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Though, I agree, it's got the Makings of a Lovely Song!

"We're Still Together, Mama & Me"...somehow my macabre mind says "Mama's maybe sittin' in a corner, deomposin' away"... You need a tidge of Clarification so we know Mama's safely "Laid to Rest" before you spring that line on us, OK? (You COULD end up with them buried side-by-side..."Next to PA"..of Course!)

You Could also show (This is Weirder, but a frequent-enough occurrence) where the Singer FOREGOES another Family (I.e., his OWN Wife & Kids), chosing to Live with Mom & ease her Life after PA is Out of the Picture.
These poor devils never marry, and their lives are Shattered when Ma is also Out of the Picture.

Whatever you do, keep workin'on this one, cuz it's Worthy!

Best Wishes,
Stan



Posted on Apr 14, 2000, 9:51 AM
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