I remember this from a while back. Very intriguing song with lots of suspense. It's novel, well-crafted songs like this that really pitch well. Great twist on a universal theme. Shannon gave you an excellent critique; I agree with most of her points. "Clever man" would work well and not give anything away, I think. This is definitely worth tweaking until it's right. It's an eye-catcher.
Good luck!
Michelle
Posted on Apr 15, 2000, 1:54 PM from IP address 205.240.113.195