Anthony,
My computer has been down since Tuesday so I
haven't critiqued since then.
I like the idea you have going here. It's
original and you always handle the sob-side of
life with just the right dash of satire.
Maybe in the second verse, third line you could jump on over to "Midway there was......"
Then in the third verse "Along about the last..."
This or something of the kind might cover the
entire thirteen but keep the song in the 3/4
minutes range.
Good job again......rjmaness
Posted on Apr 20, 2000, 11:16 AM from IP address 63.67.89.153