Hi Susan,
You seem to have been following me around the posts today, I Like what you have here,
I hope you are not writing from personal
experience, But you have captured the
scene of a sad breakup, very very well,
the only thing I would say is look at the
accented rythmn of each line.
If you take verse one as the standard for
the song some of the verses would be hard to
keep the same melody, it doesent allways
have to be exactly right with sylables
but it wanders off a little here and there
A good way is to tap out a rythmn for
the first line of the first verse, and see
if that repeats its self on the other verses
other wise you can get unstressed sylables
on stressed accents.
Try the method out on a couple of hits and
then apply it to your own work.
If it is not clear I can recomend a great
book that I refer to a lot.
Best Wishes Peter Kristian
Posted on Apr 30, 2000, 5:13 PM from IP address 213.36.45.23