I just had to lick on this after I read the title. This idea almost works, but it's SO gimmicky that it's pushed into unmarketable-novelty territory. I must say, though, you lost me in the first two lines. I guess the "toxic river" has to do with tears, but that's not made clear until it's too late.
This one might be worth working on, but like I said, it's such a wacky idea, I dunno if it's worth the trouble. I like the song structure, though-- nice ramp-ups. Good luck with it whatever you do.
Posted on May 1, 2000, 4:39 PM from IP address 136.2.1.101