I like this story, and you write pictures very well.. I would really love to hear the melody for this one.
Onc other thought, depending on melody, I think you can edit some un-needed words ( i'd be happy to elaborate if you want)<but don't want to butt in..
As far as the story goes.... It's pretty depressing from beginning to end.. nothing wrong with that,, but I was waiting to hear the "moral of the story" or.. the "hook"...
Why did they divorce in the first place?
and why does he keep rescuing her....
does she keep going back to the same @sshole? What does he think about that... ? Why does she do it? Or is he just the babysitter... catching her when she falls.. <(ohhhh not There's an idea!) haha.. for a hook I mean.
any audio? let me know at redwriter1@yahoo.com
thanks.. and great story!
www.mp3.com/kaylynn
Posted on May 5, 2000, 6:54 PM from IP address 63.25.252.228
