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Hi Gaby,

Hey this is a nice universal one. Really like the hook and storyline. The bridge is awesome. I think some of the lines in verse one need a little rearranging? Wasn't sure if the last line was referring to the style of her mood or to the preceeding lines about what she's trying to hide. Clarify the execution of the lines and I think that will polish this one up nicely. Good luck with it, Colleen



Posted on May 6, 2000, 9:38 PM
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