"Misunderstood" -- critiqued

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No need for the "-" ... unless perhaps, you wanted a female lead vocalist to do this, then you could change the title to "Miss-Understood" which could be clever. Otherwise, it's one word.

Unfortunately, the rest of this is also kind of "one word", to be honest with you. Not only is it only saying one thing, it's saying it the exact same way -- over and over again. You really need to mix things up ... or at least tell your listener more about the cause of the singer's being misunderstood. Otherwise, it's just so much whining that will be quickly tuned out.

I think part of this stems from the lack of structure. You seem to have been unable to decide whether you want this to be Refrain structure, or Verse/Chorus structure. If you are not familiar with those terms, I suggest you visit Shayne's "Songwriting Tips" page, or invest in a book on the craft. There are any number of excellent titles available.

Now we all write for different reasons, some for fun, others to be "discovered", some to put bread on the table, yet others for therapy. But whichever your reasons and goals for your songwriting, don't stop. Practice is the only way to improve. Best of luck.

Don Rowe



Posted on May 10, 2000, 3:24 PM
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