Where No Man has Gone Before...

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Hi Big G! (Oops..bad choice of Nicknames today, Eh?)

Man's "Quest for the Unknown"...a fine "Tribute" if ever there was...& The Humor's There!

(We won't worry about "Airplay" this time around, now will we?)

I'd suggest making "Some" into "Someone"..sorta yearns for that Syllable & a tad more "Specific"-ness.

The Verb "To Lie" has been abused here (Maybe Intentionally)...but "As she lies there" would hit MY Ear Smooother... (Funny.."Ain't" doesn't bother me a bit, but "Lay-vs-Lie"'s like a Fingernail on a Blackboard fer Me---)

It's Good, Coarse FUN, and every Relationship Needs Its Share. You've certainly "Captured" the Frustration here well!

Good Coarse "KUDOS!"
Stan



Posted on May 16, 2000, 9:55 AM
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