As I get "Into" this Lyric, I WANT to like it, AND The Singer...but you do Things to Both that sorta "turn Me Off"...
You start out Writing about Very Specific Things... "Wood Grain on the Floor" "Narrow Sidewalk"..."Private Gate"...
THEN, in your Chorus, we get BIZZARE Imagery:
"Standing on one leg"
"Weak in the knee"
"Here to entertain you"
"..Pull the rug out from under me"
Ending up with The Singer "Laughing at myself"
(AND "Questioning Why" as well...) These Demented Statements are "BEST Handled" in Anything BUT "First Person" Narratives....
(Heck, Jefferson Starship's Description of "Lather was 30 years Old Today" covered all Sorts of Demented Behviour, but was Easy-for-a-Listener-to-Enjoy, because An OUTSIDER was Describing this Demented Behaviour.)
Your Next Verse starts out with a "Debatable Aphorism"..."Love is not over
It is merely Replaced".. and ends in a near-cliche, "Hoping for a break in this bad connection"
Last Verse...Singer Indicates he "Can't Change" & my Mind yells back "Spineless WIMP!" "Who is Civil & who is the Savage" closes the Show..."Who CARES" yells back my Mind, because NOTHING you've written about This Pair has endeared EITHER Of 'EM To My Heart!
So that's My Problem with this song...I WANT TO Like it...but as Written, I CAN'T!
Sorry!
Best Wishes,
Stan
Posted on May 21, 2000, 1:36 AM from IP address 209.240.200.137