Hi Charlie,
Beautiful piece here.
Only a suggestion off the top of my head (Verse 2):
Once I give my love to you
Let's make out hearts one, not two
When we decide to cross that line
Polish and shine Charlie, and you'll have a beautiful song here.
Keep writing!
Marilyn
Posted on May 22, 2000, 9:37 PM from IP address 209.83.15.8
