I love the hook and sentiment. It's a very well written piece, but lacks universal appeal for today's audiences because, there is no current war going on, and hasn't been anything for sometime. I was thinking you were referring to Vietnam with the jungles etc. If you could set up a different setting, for writing this last letter it would make it more appealing. One thought would be approaching it from the third person, perhaps a son or daughter finding the letter and telling the story, would work nicely?
It's a sweet one regardless,Good luck with it,
Colleen
Posted on May 26, 2000, 8:56 AM from IP address 209.240.200.117