Hi Bobbie

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Ouch, caught up in the mid life crisis!

Lucky for me I passed that at age 18 just after Bjorn Borg won his nth Wimbledon title. Then I read a bunch of Herman Hesse which really put my head in a dumpster. Lucky for me I found Ayn Rand next but had to spend the next few years tempering her philosophy.

But I digress.

Last line in V1, how about "instead of flying" after "been treading water"

Now the next part.

I actually read this first at JPF, and read Greg's comment, and I agree that meeting someone to "pull your head out of a dumpster" is a bit of "deus ex machina" (now you know why I responded here, look at DJ's lyric and this terms definition ...essentially, you took a "convenient way out" of your dillemna)

He's probably right that you could come to a revelation without love, since it was not lack of love, but lack of direction that put you here.

Still pretty good though.

Happy Canyon Weekend
John




Posted on Nov 24, 2000, 10:49 PM
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