Pretty good lyric. As a composer first, I usually look for consistant meter in a lyric. You done pretty well. One line seemed a little awkward on first read but not that much. "Then you came along and changed all that" I'd probably drop "then" from it. But depending on the way the singer phrases the line, it still isn't that forced. Actually, it flowed very smoothly. Good storyline.
Posted on Nov 25, 2000, 3:20 AM from IP address 205.138.223.205