This is probably the best lyric I recall reading of yours. There's not much I can suggest for it except a general punching-up of some lines here and there. (Like at the end of verse 3-- that could read something like "It'll take a lot more road to get over you.")
I especially like the line about the maid, though it doesn't make him sound too sympathetic. I'm not sure what you mean by "30 miles from this town", though. Do you mean 30 miles from the nearest town? I dunno. This quite fine overall. Good luck with it!
P.S.: "Fresh Towels" is a neat title, but the title seems to be "A Few More Miles From You", IMO.
Posted on Nov 29, 2000, 7:00 PM from IP address 136.2.1.101