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tributary veins

September 30 2009 at 10:30 PM
jOsH 

 
He drinks his
Way into tomorrow

Swollen eyes and
Shaky hands

Tell the tales.
Partially. Part.

Of the story's
Stem broke mid-

Dream; part lost
In the iris

Damaged by a
Body of a boy

That rises too
Early to place

Emphasis on sleep
Or Anything, and

Anyways he's got
Nowhere to go

The gin blossoming
On his sad smile

The sun setting like
Seduction into clouds

Like sheets. Wel-
Coming skin.

 
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another frightened reflection

Re: tributary veins

October 1 2009, 3:20 PM 

josh...

i so want to collaborate with you someday
(maybe at roo)

you're mind is brilliant

this calmed me down ha

smile

 
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seashelllz

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October 4 2009, 11:41 AM 

i've read this a bunch of times now and i just like it more each time! it's very cool, reminds me of beat-style poetry, loved the short couplets and the ending, especially!

 
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tanner

Re: tributary veins

October 17 2009, 1:35 PM 

great use of rhythm in this josh. loved it.

 
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