Lisa's Counting Crows Shrine

 


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taut

October 3 2009 at 3:59 PM
 

 
feel the blodd of
october, orange veins, trees
shudder and fear and
fearlessness battle like
babies
for air

all this premature preening
like white hearts in snow, invisible avenues the
dead drew with their empty
walking souls

we are masks, skin and bone and muscle
fleeing blue, too much alike in
what's undernearth, too many old things
in the attic
now there are songs, you stood for
sleepwalking summers

but broke in winter, ruptured your own
vast and frozen fashions, oars and barges
that carried what couldn't be held
by something as alive as arms

now lives are listened to carefully, circled
by stones, funeral families feed each other
old bread, hiding the crumbs from the
formation-flying crows

closed eyes, we feel with our hands, with
voices that bounce around in the dark
boomerang back to our own undisciplined
ears, every edge amplified

classical music, decisioned destinies blockaded
protested, all glaring examples of colonial
backlash corsets pulled tight enough to teach
ribs to rein in the breath, the breather
the breathing

slowed to a standstill.

 
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another frightened reflection

Re: taut

October 3 2009, 6:06 PM 

this whole piece was truly fantastic.
it really was

"decisioned destinies blockaded
protested"
...and that line said it all for me,
it spoke volumes beyond normal decimals

smile
Sarah

 
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seashelllz

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October 4 2009, 11:39 AM 

thanks, Sarah! appreciate your appreciation for the dark edge in this...

Kerry

 
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Re: taut

October 4 2009, 8:38 PM 

Not that this piece wasn't great, because it really was, but I can't get the line "you stood for sleepwalking summers" out of my head. Great stuff

 
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tanner

Re: taut

October 17 2009, 1:48 PM 

the descriptions in this are so richly dark and beautiful. great piece.

 
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