thrumming in my head-your throb thick
like a laugh, sweetcandy in the country
all my smiles were planets.young
enough to knockdown;

velvet evolution, echoed ecology
mitered by mean magicians, we
are all one icicle away from
ending both of our games.

p.s.
i loved typewriters more than you

Liked the alliteration and assonance, and really liked 'all my smiles were planets.'
Nice line!